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Indirect Letters/Job Search
Week 4, Part 1
Reminder
1. Slideshare.net/janegriffith
Today
1. Indirect letter peer edit2. Job search introduction
Grammar-rama
7Cs constructive courteous clear and concise concrete and specific complete coherent correct
Clear and Concise
Being clear from the beginning avoids follow-up
Clear and Concise
Achieve clarity through Clear paragraphs
One idea per paragraph only 10 lines maximum per paragraph Topic sentence
Clear sentences One idea per paragraph
Clear word choice jargon
Clear and Concise
Achieve clarity through Deleting wordiness/redundancy
In no way, shape, or form In the month of May I will return the stapler back to its
position. Blank’s Quirk list
Clear and Concise
With regard to your previous letter of January 6, in view of the fact that at the present time our office has a sufficient number of employees, at this point in time, we cannot offer you employment with our company.
One factor that made the report boring was the fact that it was extremely wordy.
It is advised that the meter reading should be recorded hourly by your technician.
Indirect Approach
Peer Edit Sheets
No announcements
“In this letter I will discuss” “This letter is to inform you that”
Assignment Details
Peer edit due: January 25 Final version: January 27 Write a letter using format discussed today Letter should be 200 words Choose ONE scenario:
#1-5 on page 66-67 Change scenario slightly: you already know
the person, you have already made the request, and now you are delivering bad news that it will cost more/take more time.
Job Search Introduction
Job posting Coverletter Resume
Tips: Small Groups
How to find job postings How to succeed in an interview How to make a resume/coverletter stand
out
Job Search Documents
No margin for errors Edit again and again Give to other people to read it Cater to the job—no mass send-outs Keep it short Delete information that is now too
old/irrelevant
Grammar Quiz: February 1
Comma splices Active/passive 7Cs Fragments
Comma Splices
Identify the subject and verb in each sentence:
The youth left the housing complex earlier last year.
The student was off drugs for 6 months.Her biological mother lives on the Island.Luckily, Michael has found work close to
his child’s school.
Comma Splices and Run-ons Comma splices and Run-ons Same problem: two independent clauses
fused together improperly
Comma splice:Subject verb, subject verb
I love ice cream, I love chocolateRun on:Subject verb subject verb
I love ice cream I love chocolate
Comma Splices
Dependent clause Cannot stand alone as a sentence May be missing a subject, a verb, or
have both but also a subordinating conjunction.
Example: Before I leave, I want to dance.
Comma Splices
Independent clause Can stand alone as a sentence Has at least a subject and a verb Example: The star shines.
Comma Splices
Two independent clauses cannot be fused together on their own.
Comma Splices
Comma Splice: When a comma is doing the work of period. Comma is too weak to take this role Comma = weak Period = strong
Comma Splices
Examples His new album has an interesting picture
on the cover, in other words the cover demands attention.
Hand gestures are important for everyone, however they are a means of survival for the hearing impaired.
Tools We Need:
Coordinating Conjunction (“co-con”) FANBOYS: for, and, nor, but, or, yet, so
Subordinating Conjunctions (“sub-cons”) Examples: after, although, as, because,
before, even though, if, once, rather, than, since, that, though, unless, while
How to Fix a comma splice/run-on1. Stronger punctuation2. Use a coordinating conjunction3. Make one phrase dependent
How to Fix a comma splice/run-on1. Use stronger punctuation
1. Period2. Semi-colon and a transitional phrase
1. Examples: also, anyway, besides, furthermore, incidentally, moreover, otherwise, thus, however, in addition
He’s an excellent swimmer; he won an Olympic medal.
He’s an excellent swimmer. He won an Olympic medal.
He’s not a good swimmer; however, he enjoys the water.
How to Fix a comma splice/run-on2. Add a coordinating conjunction
FANBOYS
He’s an excellent swimmer, and he won an Olympic medal.
How to Fix a comma splice/run-on3. Make one phrase dependent
with a subordinating word.by changing it entirely
He is recognized as a great swimmer because he won an Olympic medal.
His great swimming ability won him an Olympic medal.
Try It!