Building an Essay Stair

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Building an Essay By Molly Beer

6th Grade Language Arts

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you through this presentation. Enjoy!


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Please write an

essay about your favorite

possession.


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How do I useparagraphs?

What’s a thesisstatement?

What the…? Anessay?


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How do you write an essay?Parts of an Essay

Focus:Thesis tate!ent

Paragra"hing

#$ First% you need to &now the'

($ )e*t% !a&e sure you stay focused on the !ain idea$

+$ As you write% re!e!,er to use'


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- lo.e !y i"hone$ When I don’t have it, Ifeel frustrated and lost. It is my favorite

possession$My iphone keeps me connected to my

favorite people. I am constantly communicating with my mom , my husband, and my threefriends: Michelle, im, and !eb. It also helps

me stay in touch with my cousin "ob who livesout of town.

#ll of my beloved music is at the tips of myfingertips when I have my phone. If I am in thecar, I can plug in my phone and be instantly

cheered up or calmed down by the sounds of!ave or whomever I am wanting to hear at thatmoment.

$astly, when I am bored, my phone keepsme entertained. While I am waiting, I can checkmy email, go online, or play games. It sure beatssitting and staring at a wall with nothing to do.

rts of an Essay

n

-ntroduction

/onclusion

Body

Thesistate!ent


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%our introduction "aragra"h must includetwo things:

&. an interesting lead0hoo&

*You only have a fewseconds to G" yourreader so you#ve got to

draw hi$%her in&'(C)Y.

'. a thesis state!ent


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(ere are some options for leads)hooks:

!ialogue

Interesting *uestion+et the mood)scene#ction

(umorigurative $anguage-more leads and eamples


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/hesis statements are0

1Flashlights that shine down into therest of the story$234ohn McPhee

thesis state!ent: a sentence that tells whatthe essay is about1 the most important part of anessay


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I love my iphone. When I don’thave it, I feel frustrated and lost. It

is my favorite possession.

$ook at my introduction paragraph. It could use somerevision. It has both a lead sentence and a thesis, but arethey good enough2

Answer the following revision questions:

&. !oes the lead sentence hook the reader2 yes no

'. !oes the thesis statement introduce the essay’s topic well2yes

no


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I love my iphone. When I don’thave it, I feel frustrated and lost. It

is my favorite possession.

(urray3 %ou are right3 4lick here to see a new lead.


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5hat is only three inches talland can tal&% sing% and "lay

ga!es? -ts !y i"hone$ When Idon’t have it, I feel frustrated andlost. It is my favorite possession.

Much better lead


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%ou are right3 (ere is a betterthesis statement:Because it connects meto my loved ones, holds

my music, andentertains me, myiphone is

my favorite possession.


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5ot really3 /he first sentence is kind

of 67"I58. It doesn’t grab the reader’sattention.

$ead sentences should use oneof the following:!ialogueInteresting *uestion+et the mood)scene #ction(umorigurative $anguage-more leads and eamples

Try again!


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+orry, wrong answer3

What is only three inches tall andcan talk, sing, and play games2 It’s

my iphone. When I don’t have it, Ifeel frustrated and lost. -t is !yfa.orite "ossession$

/his thesis state!ent is not specific enough.

Try again


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$ike the supporting detail sentences in a paragraph,these paragraphs support your introduction paragraphand your thesis statement. /hey fill the essay with details

and eamples.

$et9s look at the body of the sample essay.

Body

The ,ody is the 1!eat2 of an essay .


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My i"hone &ee"s !e connected to !y

fa.orite "eo"le$ I am constantly communicating withmy mom , my husband, and my three friends: Michelle,im, and !eb. It also helps me stay in touch with mycousin "ob who lives out of town.

All of !y ,elo.ed !usic is at the ti"s of !yfingerti"s when - ha.e !y "hone$ If I am in the car,

I can plug in my phone and be instantly cheered up orcalmed down by the sounds of !ave or whomever I am wanting to hear at that moment.

Lastly% when - a! ,ored% !y "hone &ee"s !eentertained$ While I am waiting, I can check my email,go online, or play games. It sure beats sitting and staring

at a wall with nothing to do.

-5otice that eachparagraph has a topicsentence that supportsthe thesis statement in

the introduction.

/hese are all reasons that my iphone ismy favorite possession.


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support to hold, carry, or bear the weight of1 in writing, ideas must be

supported to convince the reader

thesis statement

reasons)topic sentences


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thesis state!ent: a sentence thattells what the essay is about1 the most

important part of an essay1the main idea

=ample: "ecause it connects $e to

$y loved ones+ holds $y $usic+ andentertains $e+ $y iphone is $y favorite possession.


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/he conclusion is the last paragraph wheremain points are summari>ed and the thesis is

restated in a different way.

I am glad my mom got me my phone for4hristmas last year. I can’t imagine my life without it. It makes me smile.

,hich of the following conclusions fits the definition

above- Click on the one you think is best.

I am glad my mom surprised me with an iphone for4hristmas last year. I can’t imagine my life without it. Ithelps me stay in touch with friends and family, allows meto have a ?soundtrack@ at all times, and even protects mefrom boredom. Mostly it is my favorite, because it makes

me smile.


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My conclusion paragraph has the

thesis, but not exactly how I wrote it inthe introduction paragraph. My threemain points about my favorite possessionare all mentioned. Lastly, I end with a

strong, creative final statement.

- a! glad !y !o! sur"rised !e with ani"hone for /hrist!as last year$ I can’t imaginemy life without it. It helps me stay in touch with friendsand family, allows me to have a ?soundtrack@ at alltimes, and even protects me from boredom. Mostly itis my favorite, because it makes me smile.


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/his paragraph does not meetthe re*uirementsof a good conclusion.

- a! glad !y !o! got!e !y "hone for /hrist!as

last year$ I can’t imagine mylife without it. It makes mesmile.

/he main reasons are notsummari>ed, and the thesis isnot restated.


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"eady to take a *ui>2

4lick on the burger

If you need a review,

click on the picture below.


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Click on the correct answer for each.

. /he introduction:a. is at the end of an essay b. includes a hook and the thesis

c. includes the thesis and a conclusiond. includes the specific eamples for each reason

'. /he conclusion:a. restates the thesis b. summari>es the main points

c. includes a strong final statementd. all of the above

A. /he body:a. is at the beginning b. is not the ?meat@ of an essay

c. includes the specific eamples for each reasond. all of the above

B. /he thesis statement:a. creates focus for the entire essay b. is specific eamples and details

c. should have nothing to do with the main idead. should be written only at the end of the essay


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%es3 %ou are right3

6ack to *ui>


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4ongratulations3 %ou finished the first section, ?Parts of an =ssay.@

ow+ head back to the ho$e page and click onnu$ber two+ /0ocus1 2hesis 3tate$ent.4


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Wrong answer

%ou are in the dog house until you get it right3

5lease review the ter$s on the next slide+ and try again.

P t f = /


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Parts of =ssay /erms

#$ introduction: the first paragraph that includes a hook to grab thereader and a thesis statement telling what the essay is about

'. hoo& or lead must ChookC your reader into your writing1grabs and holds the reader’s attention, making them wantto read the rest of your paper.

A. thesis state!ent: a sentence that tells what the essay is about1the most important part of an essay

7$ ,ody ;of an essay


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If you could put your essay into one sentence, what would it be2

Because it connects me to my loved ones, holdsmy music, and entertains me, my iphone is my

favorite possession.

74D+ t l i t f tt ti


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thesis statement

reasons)topic sentences

eamples and details;supporting sentences<

74D+ : a central point of attentionEvery sentence in the essay supports the $ainidea 6thesis state$ent7.


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/o keep your essay focused, make sure that =E="%sentence supports the thesis statement.

$et’s check the body of the original

essay for focus.


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My i"hone &ee"s !e connected to !yfa.orite "eo"le$ I am constantly communicating withmy mom , my husband, and my three friends: Michelle,im, and !eb. It also helps me stay in touch with my

cousin "ob who lives out of town. It is hard to find timeto maintain contact with my friends and family, so beingable to chat with them when I am on the go is wonderful.

All of !y ,elo.ed !usic is at the ti"s of !yfingerti"s when - ha.e !y "hone$ If I am in the car,I can plug in my phone and be instantly cheered up or

calmed down by the sounds of !ave or whomever I am wanting to hear at that moment. If it were up to me,music would be playing every second, so it is great to beable to access it as much as possible using my phone.

Lastly% when - a! ,ored% !y "hone &ee"s !eentertained$ While I am waiting, I can check my email,

go online, or play games. It sure beats sitting and staringat a wall with nothing to do.

-/he topic sentencescreate 74D+ bysupporting the thesis

statement.

5ow, let’s look closer to see if allsentences in each paragraph are focused.


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My iphone keeps me connected to myfavorite people. I am constantly communicating with my mom , my husband, and my three

friends: Michelle, im, and !eb. It also helpsme stay in touch with my cousin "ob who livesout of town. It is hard to find time to maintaincontact with my friends and family, so being ableto chat with them when I am on the go is

wonderful.

#ll of the black sentences are 74D+=!the blue topic sentence .


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#ll of my beloved music is at the tips ofmy fingertips when I have my phone. If Iam in the car, I can plug in my phone and

be instantly cheered up or calmed down bythe sounds of !ave or whomever I am wanting to hear at that moment. #lso, when I eercise, I can connect myheadphones and be motivated by mymusic. If it were up to me, music would beplaying every second, so it is great to beable to access it as much as possible usingmy phone.

#ll of the black sentences are focusedon the blue topic sentence .


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$astly, when I am bored, my phonekeeps me entertained. While I am waiting, Ican check my email, go online, or make lists.I enFoy being productive, and it sure beatssitting and staring at a wall with nothing todo. 7ne thing I wish is that I had chosen a

different color cover. With my phone, Inever feel like I am wasting my time becauseI can always be working on something.

Click on the sentence that is not focused.


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$astly, when I am bored, my phonekeeps me entertained. While I am waiting, I can check my email, go online,

or make lists.

This sentence SUPPORTS the topic sentence

because it give specific activities I can do onmy phone that I entertain me.

Try again

This sentence is focused.


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$astly, when I am bored, my phone keepsme entertained.

I enFoy being productive, and it

sure beats sitting and staring at a wall withnothing to do.

This sentence SUPPORTS the thesisbecause it explains hy my phone

entertains me.Try again



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$astly, when I am bored, my phone keeps meentertained.

7ne thing I wish is that I had chosen adifferent color cover.

This sentence has nothing to do ith

the topic sentence. The paragraph is

about my phone entertaining me. It is

not about ho it loos.

47""=4/3 /his sentence is not focused.


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$astly, when I am bored, my phone keepsme entertained.

With of my phone, I never feel like Iam wasting my time because I can always be working on something.

This sentence SUPPORTS the

topic sentence by explaining it

further.

Try again


' i th f ll i d th i t t t li k th bl t i


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'sing the following red thesis state$ent+ click on the blue topicsentence that is not focused.

It is important to eercise regularly in order to lead a healthy life.

"aising your heart rate three times a week for at least AG minutesstrengthens you circulatory system.

Physical activity makes your brain function better.

=ercise can be fun which improves your mood and outlook on life.

=ating three wellHbalanced meals daily is good for you.


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Wrong choice3

/his sentence is about how

eercise leads to a healthy life.

Try again

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8ood choice3

/his sentence is about eating, noteercising. =ven though eating welldoes lead to a healthy life, this essay’s

74D+ is eercise, so all paragraphsmust be about eercise.

Congratulations+ you have finished sectiontwo+ /0ocus12hesis 3tate$ent.4 8ead back2o the ho$e page and click on the final 3ection+ /5aragraphing.4

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&. paragraph made up of a topic sentence, several sentences of

details everything in the paragraph should be about the onetopic of the paragraph. (f you start writing about a new topic+that $eans you need to start a new paragraph.

'. topic sentence tells your readers what your paragraph is

about1 introduces the topic of your paragraph

A. supporting sentences the details, eamples, and informationreaders need to understand the topic. 2hese sentences shouldcontain details that clearly support the topic sentence.

Parts of a paragraph

B. closing sentence a sentence that wrapsHup or summari>esthe main ideas of your paragraph


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$astly, when I am bored, my

phone keeps me entertained. While Iam waiting, I can check my email, goonline, or make lists. I enFoy beingproductive, and it sure beats sitting

and staring at a wall with nothing todo. 6ecause of my phone, I never feellike I am wasting my time because Ican always be working on something.

To"ic entence

u""ortingentences

/losing entence


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(ave one main idea;to"ic sentence< in each

paragraph, and make sure that everything in thatparagraph has to do with;su""orts< that main idea,otherwise known as focus.

When you start on a new idea, let the reader know bystarting a new paragraph.

=nd each paragraph with a closing sentence.

Make sure that each of the paragraphs has to do withthe thesis or topic of the essay as a whole. /his is focus,too.

Paragraphing "ules

M i h & t d t


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My i"hone &ee"s !e connected to !yfa.orite "eo"le$ I am constantly communicating with my mom , my husband, and my three friends:Michelle, im, and !eb. It also helps me stay intouch with my cousin "ob who lives out of town. Itis hard to find time to maintain contact with myfriends and family, so being able to chat with them when I am on the go is wonderful.

All of !y ,elo.ed !usic is at the ti"s of!y fingerti"s when - ha.e !y "hone$ If I amin the car, I can plug in my phone and be instantlycheered up or calmed down by the sounds of !aveor whomever I am wanting to hear at that moment.If it were up to me, music would be playing everysecond, so it is great to be able to access it as muchas possible using my phone.

Lastly% when - a! ,ored% !y "hone&ee"s !e entertained$ While I am waiting, Ican check my email, go online, or make lists. IenFoy being productive, and it sure beats sittingand staring at a wall with nothing to do. 6ecauseof my phone, I never feel like I am wasting my time

because I can always be working on something.

" ne paragraph

is started for each

ne reason.

#$otice that allparagraphs are

indented.

%losing

sentences


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%our turn

&. 7pen up a Microsoft Word document.'.Write a paragraph about your favorite season.

Include the following:

/opic sentence#t least two supporting sentences4losing sentence

A. ollow paragraphing rulesB. Print your paragraph and hand it in to me.

3ee an exa$ple paragraph on the next slide.


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My favorite time of year is when winterbecomes spring. /here’s nothing better thansliding on icy snow when the sun is shining.+ticky spring snow creates perfect snowballs.When that warm spring air begins to sneak in, Ican’t help but smile. 6ye, bye bulky winter coatand thick sweaters3


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Please write an

essay about your favorite

possession.


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Sweet, anessay!

I have theperfect thesis

statement!

I love usingparagraphs!


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