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ch# 5—suggests the Angus/Rob fight scene could be omitted, replaced by Angus* s thoughts to himself as he determines that*s it, Rob has done the worst he could, he *11 have no more to do with the man# Or if not omit it, change the opening dialogue so Angus isn*t so reasonable—she finds it a reprise of their 2 previou arguments—but just boiling mad.
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insert "not proven" verdict a time or two in the ms before Angus thinks it about
Stanley. Possibly: during search in Helena for Iucas.. .Verdict neither guilty nor
innocent... Or somewhere in ch . 2; in ch. 3, Angus could think it after rejection
by Anna#
Better: lookii^ at irax Anna, maybe on 2nd meeting in her school, he thinks she personifies the Scottish x£ verdict "wot proven", in her thinking#
Angus never addresses Adair in his mind until some turning point in the book;
make plain in how he says it that it is the first time—1"Dair, until now I have
u never..•