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Collab Essay - EAZ2 by Elizabeth Farley WORD COUNT 2162 CHARACTER COUNT 10152 TIME SUBMITTED 10-DEC-2013 05:43PM PAPER ID 382584408
Collab Essay - EAZ2by Elizabeth Farley
WORD COUNT 2162
CHARACTER COUNT 10152
TIME SUBMITTED 10-DEC-2013 05:43PM
PAPER ID 382584408
FINAL GRADE
100/100
Collab Essay - EAZ2GRADEMARK REPORT
GENERAL COMMENTS
InstructorHi EAZ2,
I have to say that the language used throughoutdiscussion of your report is excellent. Still, proofread forany errors before submitting your final draft. But, goodjob in that respect.
You are missing your Abstract, but i trust that you willhave that done by the time you submit your final draft.
One important factor is that you need an additionalsource for this report. I made the suggestion that youuse the findings from another study such as this andcompare/contrast those findings with yours in thediscussion of your analysis/conclusion. Also, note thechanges I made to your in-text parenthetical citations atthe beginning. You don't need to cite every singe line.
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Comment 2 You only need the page number. But you don't need to include the page number onthe cover sheet.
Comment 3 Center the title
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Comment 4 No Abstract???
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Weak Transition Weak paragraph transition:Although paragraphs are separate, individual steps of your paper, it is important to clearly demonstratea logical connection between them. Generally speaking, the way your paragraphs relate to one anotherdisplays how sound your argument really is. A paragraph that begins with "also" or "in addition" offersa weak transition from the previous point, even though it may develop a highly interesting and relatedpoint.Additional Comment You need a better transition from your background information into thisparagraph discussing your specific experiment.
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Comment 9 Excellent Materials and Methods section
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Indent Paragraph Indent each paragraph at the beginning.
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Comment 10 Please incorporate an additional source. You need two sources total.
You mostly need a source that discusses the findings of other such studies, and discuss thatsource's findings in comparison/contrast to the findings from your experiment.
