Graduation-Required Assessment for Diploma
Written Composition
Item Sampler
2007
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What would be your dream job? Tell about that job andexplain why it would be a good job for you.
Include details so your reader will understand your choice.
Remember you are writing for an adult reader.
REMINDERS
Write as neatly as possible.Make sure your composition has the following:
a clear, focused central idea
supporting details (reasons, examples)
a logical organization (beginning, middle, end)
correct spelling, grammar and punctuation
complete sentences
MINNESOTA
GRAD & BST
WRITTEN COMPOSITION
(Item Sampler)
WRITING PROMPT FOLDER
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How the GRAD Item Sampler Was CreatedThe Item Sampler mirrors the format of the GRAD Written Composition as the writingprompt folder and answer sheet each reflect the way the test will look. Prior to testing, theGraduation-Required Assessment for Diploma (GRAD) Item Sampler prompts are reviewed thoroughly by Minnesota teachers; they have also been evaluated for appropriateness and biasby advisory panels of education professionals from across the state to ensure no specializedknowledge is required. In addition, Minnesota students have responded to these prompts on previous tests.
Students may use an expository/informational mode with narrative and persuasive elments todevelop this compostion. Students may choose to respond to prompts in many ways and may draw from a variety of personal experiences. Students should make effective choices in theorganization of their writing. They should include details to illustrate and elaborate their ideasand use appropriate conventions of the English language.
score between 0-6. A score of 3 or more is considered passing. Scorable papers not passing (scores 1 and 2) will be reviewed using the writing domains.
The GRAD Written Composition Item Sampler* has the following design: • 4-page writing prompt folder containing a writing prompt, a checklist of reminders and
pre-writing pages• Answer book with 3 pages for a student to write their final composition
*Note: Both the writing prompt folder and answer book have GRAD & BST at the top. The same promptsand answer books are being used for these tests as the BST is being phased out.
The Contents of This Teacher’s GuideThree sections are contained in this Teacher’s Guide:
• Scoring Rubric
The Scoring Rubric is used to consistently scorecompositions from year to year. Each composition isscored according to the criteria of this rubric, no matterthe prompt chosen for that year.
• Domain Reviewing Rubric
The Domain reviewing rubric is used to evaluate eachfeature of a writing sample with a non-passing score.
• Sample Paper Annotations
These annotations show how different types of student responses were scored based onthe Scoring Rubric. They also explain why certain responses received the scores theydid. Teachers can use these annotations to prepare students in writing thoroughcompositions. Papers receiving a score of 1 or 2 are also reviewed using the domainreviewing rubric.
Students will respond to one prompt. The response is scored holistically, giving the paper a
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State Standards & Test Specifications
The Item Sampler is primarily intended to familiarize teachers and students with the format ofthe test. The best preparation for the content of the Graduation-Required Assessment forDiploma is done as a part of your curriculum planning. When doing that, reference theMinnesota Academic Standards and the Minnesota Graduation-Required Assessments forDiploma test specifications. For further questions about the GRAD, email us [email protected].
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• has a beginning, a middle and an end.
• demonstrates a control of language that enhances the overall quality of the response.
• may have errors in sentence formation, usage and mechanics, but they do not detract from the
overall quality of the composition.
Score Point 3 = Proficient Composition – Passing
The composition:
• is related to the assigned topic.
• has a central idea that is clearly expressed.
• has some supporting details and sufficient development.
• has a beginning, a middle and an end.
• may present minor obstacles for the reader in moving from idea to idea.
• may have errors in sentence formation, word usage and mechanics, but they do not substantially
detract from the overall quality of the composition.
Score Point 2 = Below Proficient Composition - Not Passing
The composition:
• is related to the assigned topic.
• may be somewhat focused.
• may lack a beginning, a middle or an end.
• may present obstacles for the reader in moving from idea to idea.
• may contain errors in sentence formation, word usage and mechanics that are frequent enough to
detract from the overall quality of the composition.
Score Point 1 = Below Proficient Composition - Not Passing
The composition:
• is related to the assigned topic.
• is very difficult to follow.
• may lack a coherent focus.
• is disorganized.
• may contain errors in sentence formation, word usage and mechanics that are frequent enough to
detract from the overall quality of the composition.
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SCORE POINT 1 – SAMPLE PAPER A
FINAL SCORE: 1
This response represents a below basic composition. Although it is related to the assigned topic
(I think my dream Job wood be draing buleperns for houes or bielding.) and is somewhatfocused, errors in sentence formation (I think that. I wood Be good at Becaes it is my dream jod.
I wood like to make up my time I wood like to work and that is wie.) and mechanics are
overwhelming and substantially detract from the essay’s overall quality. Non-phoneticmisspellings of simple words (clss, jod, mied, sent, moneing, dieny) are obstacles to the reader
and make the paper very difficult to follow. Score point 1.
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Score Point 1Sample Paper A
COMPOSING
Developing Skills. This response has a single, clear central idea (I think mydream Job wood be draing buleperns for houes or bielding.) and providesadequate elaboration (Becaes I arerutea hade some clss on bule perns draing;I like to see wut I mad; I kin taek sum pried in wat I mad; Thin I kin make a buleperns of a houes and sale it for sint amont of moneing.) to explain what thewriter likes about this work and how they hope to profit by it. Closure (I will begood at it becaes it is my dream job.) is attempted.
STYLE
Minimal Skills. The vocabulary in this response remains vague and generalwith no specific or selected information. Sentences are short and choppy dueto fragmentary constructions (I think that. I wood Be good at Becaes it is mydream jod.) and no sense of voice is discernable.
SENTENCE FORMATION
Minimal Skills. The majority of the sentences are fragments (I think that.;Becaes I like to see wut I mad.; Thin I kin taek sum pried in wat I mad.) andanother is a run-together (I wood like to make up my time I wood like to workand that is wie.) There is no evidence of knowledge of sentence elements.
USAGE/GRAMMAR
Minimal Skills. Errors in usage (wood for would; thin for then; sum for some;mad for made; kin for can; owe for own; sale for sell) affect meaning and makethis response difficult to read.
MECHANICS/SPELLING
Minimal Skills. Severe misspellings of simple words, phonetic and non-phonetic (draing, houes, hade, mied, jod, wie, Becaes, moneing) are frequentand disruptive.
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SCORE POINT 1 – SAMPLE PAPER B
FINAL SCORE: 1
This response represents a below basic composition. Although it is related to the assigned topic
(My dream job is to pant carss.) and is somewhat focused, errors in sentence formation (But if
you do avrething rit ti will tren out rite and finish; gerat win it is don rite. Things you need topant.) and mechanics are overwhelming and substantially detract from the essay’s overall
quality. Non-phonetic misspellings of simple words (moen, hrd, botey, ti, gerat) are obstacles to
the reader and make the paper very difficult to follow. Score point 1.
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Score Point 1Sample Paper B
COMPOSING
Minimal Skills. Though this response does have a clear central idea (My dreamjob is to pant carss.), it exhibits a more list-like quality (It is fun and the moen isgood. Panting is so ex [easy] that I can pant in my sleep. The hrd part of pantingis the botey wrck.) rather than any real elaboration, including one actual list of“Things you need to pant.” No closure is attempted.
STYLE
Minimal Skills. The sentences in this response are basic and choppy (Mydream job is to pant carss. Panting is wat I like to Do. It is fun and the moen isgood. Panting is so ex that I can pant in my sleep.) and the vocabulary remainsbasic and vague. No voice is discernable.
SENTENCE FORMATION
Minimal Skills. Sentence formation errors (But if you do avrething rit ti will trenout rite and finish job are gerat win it is don rite.; Things you need to pant.) occurwhen this writer attempts more than basic constructions. Very little knowledge ofsentence elements is demonstrated.
USAGE/GRAMMAR
Developing Skills. Except for one problem where usage errors make for difficultreading (and finish job are gerat) the majority of features are handled well. Thereis no pattern or variety of errors that indicates a serious problem.
MECHANICS/SPELLING
Minimal Skills. Non-phonetic misspellings of simple words (moen, ex, hrd,botey, ti, gerat, Sragun, Raprater, cupraser) create major obstacles for thereader and make the paper difficult to follow.
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FINAL SCORE: 2
This response represents a below basic composition. It is related to the assigned topic and
remains focused on the central idea (My dream job would include the major qualities that I haveas a person.), but the development is vague and confusing, creating obstacles for the reader
(Would you like to travel or sleep and eat less. Be willing to lose slight damplacation that may
interfer along the way. It is very common for people to find different interests or even they may
find a better position and higher payed position. are you making to much of an effort whenpeople are not willing to accept. rough times in the home or where ever the money is a
factor...this is what my dream job will consist of, and be.). Usage problems (well for good, to for
too), sentence structure errors (These are the questions I ask my self before I take on a job. andthe job would be helping people in the community go through some rough times in the home or
where ever the money is a factor but I will need to make good choices so that this dream could
come true this is what my dream job will consist of, and be.), and persistent problems with end
punctuation further detract from this response but are not nearly so severe as the level of errorassociated with a score point of 1 (a level that makes a response difficult to follow).
Score point 2.
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COMPOSING
Developing Skills. This response contains a central idea, the three main factorsa person should ask to determine a dream job (dedacation or infactuation withthe job, see your self here in five years, how well is the income), and adequatelyelaborates on why these questions are important to consider. The studentprovides a paragraph for each factor, which while sometimes abstract, attemptsto develop each topic (would you like to travel or sleep and eat less; people tofind different interests or even they may find a better position). A clear closure isprovided in the concluding paragraph where the student briefly explains his orher own dream job (helping people in the community go through some roughtimes).
STYLE
Minimal Skills. While vocabulary may not be basic (dedacation; infactuation;income; interfer) it is vague, as the words selected do not have clear meaning inthe context of their use and there is little selective or specific informationprovided (put into it; find different interests; better position; held back; making tomuch of an effort). Little sense of audience is demonstrated and the essay readsawkwardly due to the vague vocabulary and difficulty in sentence construction.
SENTENCE FORMATION
Minimal Skills. This essay contains multiple sentence formation problems,including running sentences together without any punctuation (I think it isimportant to know how much dedacation you are going to put into it in order forthis to become your dream job would you like to travel or sleep and eat less.),simple fragments (Be willing to lose slight damplacation that may interfer alongthe way), and run-on sentences (And the job would be helping people in thecommunity go through some rough times in the home or where ever the moneyis a factor but I will need to make good choices so that this dream could cometrue) along side some correctly formed complete sentences.
USAGE/GRAMMAR
Minimal Skills. Basic usage errors with the use of incorrect words (well forgood, to for too) and incorrect word order (or even they may; how well is theincome to support you and maybe even the family; are you making to much ofan effort when people are not willing to accept ) cause some difficulty in readingthe response and affect meaning.
MECHANICS/SPELLING
Developing Skills. While this student does have a problem with the lack of theuse of question marks at the end of questions, these mistakes are not so severeas to be disruptive. The spelling mistakes that do occur tend to be in higher levelvocabulary words (dedacation; infactuation; interfer) and do not demonstrate astudent with little or no awareness of written language rules.
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FINAL SCORE: 2
This response represents a below basic composition. It is related to the assigned topic and remains focused on the central idea (If I had a dream job it would be a Dr.) but lacks the details
and development associated with higher score points. Usage problems (thier for they’re, Dr. for
doctors - plural) and a run-on sentence (After working as a Dr. I would go help other Dr.decome. detter Dr. then when I am done, I will take all my money and go home.) further detract
from this brief response but are not nearly so severe as the level of error associated with a
score point of 1 (a level that makes a response difficult to follow). Score point 2.
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COMPOSING
Minimal Skills. This response lacks the development necessary to beconsidered a satisfactory in composing. While there is a clear central idea (If Ihad a dream job it would be a Dr.) and an attempted closure (Thats my dreamjob! ), the remainder of the essay is list-like in its statements concerning what thestudent would do as a doctor (want to go allover the world; help people when inneed; help other Dr.).
STYLE
Minimal Skills. Word choices remain basic and vague throughout this response,except for the one attempt to list two different types of illnesses (Aids, Std’s).While the sentences are not simple short sentences, they do show a repetition instructure (it would be; The firt, thing I would do; I would go) that creates achoppy reading.
SENTENCE FORMATION
Minimal Skills. Given the limited amount of writing provided, the fact that onesentence is an obvious run-on (After working as a Dr. I would go help other Dr.decome. detter Dr. then when I am done, I will take all my money and go home)and another awkward, incomplete sentence (The firt, thing I would do to helppeople when in need is to see if thier sick, have virses, like Aids Std’s et…)leaves the response with only three correctly formed sentences.
USAGE/GRAMMAR
Minimal Skills. Usage problems, both in wrong words (thier for they are, Dr. forboth doctor and doctors) and word order (help I the people in need) do detractfrom the reading of this response and show a lack of consistent use of features.While these errors do not create major obstacles for the reader in understandingthe response, given the amount of writing, the variety, density and simplicity ofthe errors do demonstrate the students lack of understanding of usage andgrammar.
MECHANICS/SPELLING
Minimal Skills. Errors in spelling (allover; Firt; virses) and mechanics (Dr.; Aids;Std’s; et…) are disruptive. The response also has what appears to be a period inthe middle of a sentence (other Dr. decome. detter) and the only contraction(Thats) is missing the apostrophe. The variety of mechanic and spelling errorsdemonstrates little awareness of written language rules.
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FINAL SCORE: 3
This paper represents a basic passing composition. It is related to the assigned topic and has a
clearly expressed central idea (My dream job is to become a mechanic.). It has a beginning,
middle and end, with sufficient development and supporting details throughout (My freindsbrother is a mechanic, and he makes 25 dollars an hour. We stayed up all night and worked on
the car. Its always nice to be able to make a little extra money on the side.), though the
development becomes repetitious at times (being a mechanic would be fun...It was fun...which
was fun - being able to fix my own car. If my car breaks down I would be able to fix it.). Noobstacles are present. Errors in usage (freinds for friend’s, alot for a lot) and sentence structures
(I also think I would be a good mechanic and a good boss how about you?) are fairly minor and
do not substantially detract from the overall quality. The composition, however, does notdemonstrate a control of language that enhances its overall quality and is not well developed
with supporting details, preventing it from attaining a higher score. Score point 3.
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FINAL SCORE: 3
This paper represents a basic passing composition. It is related to the assigned topic and has a
clearly expressed central idea (to be a spanish talk show host in Mexico.). The progression leading up to the final “Dream Job” was not seen as a loss of focus. It has a beginning, middle
and end, with sufficient development and supporting details throughout (It started when I was a
little girl, and over the years has formed into my goal. I discovered the six o’clock news. We
went out into the neighborhood and interviewed any one that would talk to us.). Errors in usage (than for then, you for a your) and sentence structures (Although it was about to make a small
change.) are fairly minor and do not substantially detract from the overall quality. The
composition, however, does not demonstrate a control of language that enhances its overall quality and is not well developed with supporting details, preventing it from attaining a higher
score. Score point 3.
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FINAL SCORE: 4
This response represents a competent composition. It is related to the assigned topic and has a
central idea that is clearly expressed (I prefer to dream about becoming an obstritician). The
paper is well developed with supporting details (Six years of regular college, three years
medical school, and three years of working in a hospital before legally becoming a doctor will be very hard work. Also, the 36 hour Shifts will be difficult and make you want to quit. …you get to
help the parents throughout the pregnancy, deliver the baby, and watch the child grow and
develop). The response has a beginning, middle and end, and it demonstrates a control oflanguage that enhances the overall quality of the composition (Obstriticians don’t get fame and
glory, but they do help many people, experience the miracle of birth…. I personally think
becoming an Obstritician would be the best job for me. Where else do you get to deliver babiesand experience the miracle of birth? nowhere. That would give me a great sense of
accomplishment and would fulfill my life dream). Errors do not detract from the overall quality.
It is the combination of all these factors that results in a score point 4.
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FINAL SCORE: 4
This response represents a competent composition. It is related to the assigned topic and has a
central idea that is clearly expressed (to become a famous singer). The paper is well developed
with supporting details (We would stay longer in sunny states, and make the cold states shortand sweet. I would enjoy getting up on stage and singing for millions of people, and hopefully I
would write my own music. I would write inspirational lyrics. I would only be in the music
business for a short time though, so I could start a family.). The response has a beginning,middle and end, and it demonstrates a control of language that enhances the overall quality of
the composition (I would love to travel around the world, sharing my talent with different people.
Traveling around the world performing concerts for months would be my dream. I would love to
make a positive impact on others). Errors do not detract from the overall quality. It is thecombination of all of these factors that results in a score point 4.
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FINAL SCORE: 5
This response represents a skillful composition. It is related to the assigned topic and
consistently remains focused on the central idea of wanting to go into the medical field. The
writing is evenly and richly developed (For generations my family has had a number of members
interested in medicine. The biggest “‘suspect’” for my desire to become a doctor is my mother …She is a General Practitioner …). It has an effective beginning, middle, and end, and its
progression of ideas results in an overall sense of wholeness. The specific and engaging word
choice is indicative of a control of language that helps enhance the overall quality of theresponse (I have heard stories of little children, my age or even younger, being hit by the car of
an extremely careless if not drunk driver or even beaten to death by their own parents, of
desperate citizens who have committed suicide in their bathrooms or of old ladies or gentlemenkilled by a sudden heart attack.). Finally, although there are occasional errors in sentence
formation, word usage, and mechanics, they do not detract from the overall quality of this skillful
composition. Score point 5.
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FINAL SCORE: 5
This response represents a skillful composition. It is related to the assigned topic and
consistently focuses on the central idea of wanting to become a teacher. The writing is evenly
and richly developed with selected supporting detail (He treated everyone the same no matter
your gender or ability. I was sad to see that class come to an end, but I will always rememberthe impact Mr. Troughbaugh made on my life. This was when I was sure I wanted to become a
teacher.). It has a beginning, middle, and end and its unified progression results in an overall
sense of wholeness. A control of language is apparent in the use of word choice which is bothengaging and specific (One of my favorite things about this class is making my weekly lesson
plan. While I make it I have the opportunity to gather information from multiple resources. I get
to decide what the best way to teach them a specific lesson would be.). Very few errors insentence formation, word usage, and mechanics are present, and they do not detract from the
overall quality of this skillful composition. Score point 5.
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FINAL SCORE: 6
This response represents an exceptionally skillful composition. It is related to the assigned topic
and consistently remains focused on wanting to become a pastor. The writing is richly and
evenly developed with ample selected supporting detail and elaboration that serves to clarify the
central idea (I have no idealistic view of a glorious ministry, or perpetually perfect congregationswithout dissent and problems. I harbor no illusions of always having funds to keep up with the
Jonses, nor do I believe that the path I’ve chosen is without it’s bumps and hardships.). This
piece has a purposefully crafted beginning (‘Pastor? You want to be a Pastor?! You mean like aPriest? Why would you want to do that?), middle, and end, which contribute to the overall sense
of wholeness. One of the paper’s strengths is the control of language exhibited through precise,
engaging word choice and purposefully rhythmic sentences. (Pastors, Ministers, Priests, Clergymen; whatever the title, are seen with many misconceptions. you can’t be normal and
have any fun if you’re a pastor,’ or, ‘don’t you have to wear one of those tall hats?’ No matter
how many people don’t understand why I’d want to be a pastor, who don’t understand why I
don’t care about making millions, or becoming a star athlete; I know for a fact it’s what I want todo.). Finally, a few minor errors in sentence formation, word usage, and mechanics are present
in this exceptionally skillful composition. Score point 6.
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FINAL SCORE: 6
This paper represents an exceptionally skillful composition. It is related to the assigned topicand remains consistently focused on the central idea of wanting to become an anthropology
professor. It is evenly and richly developed with ample selected supporting detail that helps to
expand the central idea ([Anthropology] calls us to examine human life and how it shapes itselfinto specific cultures that vary throught the Earth. Studying cultures and ethnicities provides
insight into our behaviors and needs as humans.). The writing is crafted with a beginning,
middle, and end, and its unified progression of ideas results in an overall sense of wholeness.The control of language—including precise, engaging word choice and varied sentences—
enhances the overall quality of the response (The world of education is made rich with the
potentials and dreams that exist in the individual; it is a world that I would surely like to be a part
of.). Additionally, this essay demonstrates a command of the rules for sentence formation, word usage, and mechanics, as very few errors are present in this exceptionally skillful piece.
Score point 6.
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