TAKS ESSAY TAKS ESSAY Discussion & Discussion & Retest Information Retest Information
TAKS ESSAYDiscussion & Retest Information
Areas Done WellSome good choices for topicsMost of you write clearly, correctly & smoothly enough to score well
Areas that Need WorkPLEASE write a storyIf you write about a specific event that is connected to the topic, you will get at least a 2Plus its easier to get a 3 or higher with a specific story
Areas that Need WorkHypothetical discussions arent as effective as REAL examples (What if)Generalities hurt you (Friends, peopleNAME specific people, places and events. Test if you dont have capitalized names, youve been WAY too general!)Avoid you it gets preachy (Have you ever thought or You should) No sermons please
Areas that Need WorkConclusion explain the change in feelings from before and after the eventOrganize into paragraphsDialogue formatKeep verb tense consistent usually past tense (story has already happened)Run-ons are a problem for a lot of you
Areas that Need WorkEdit for mechanical problemsthere, their & theyre (lots of errors)to vs. toopast vs. passed
Retest InformationNot available for 4s, Optional for 3s, Required for 2s & 1s
Grade for 1st Writing4 = 98___________________________3 = 85
___________________________2 = 75
___________________________1 = 65Grade for RetestN/A______________________3 to a 4 = 953 to a 3 = 89______________________2 to a 4 = 952 to a 3 = 852 to a 2 = 79______________________1 to a 4 = 951 to a 3 = 851 to a 2 = 751 to a 1 = 69
Grade will not go down even if you score lower on rewrite
Action Lead Its dark in that awful way that allows you to make out objects but not the black spaces behind them. My breathing comes ragged from exertion and fear. The only person I trust in the world lies on the floor beside me. I lean into him and hear that hes still breathing but its shallow and hard won. Hes hurt, I know. But I cant see how badly. I whisper his name in his ear but he doesnt respond. I feel his body but theres no blood that I can tell. The sound of his body hitting the floor minutes before was the worst thing Ive ever heard. Lisa Unger Beautiful Lies
Character LeadDoodle was born when I was seven and was, from the start a disappointment. He seemed all head, with a tiny body that was read and shriveled like an old mans. Everybody thought he was going to die. Daddy had the carpenter build a little coffin, and when he was three months old, Mama and Daddy named him William Armstrong. Such a name sounds good only on a tombstone. When he crawled on the rug, he crawled backward, as if he were in reverse and couldn't change gears. This made him look like a doodlebug, so I began calling him 'Doodle.' Renaming my brother was probably the kindest thing I ever did for him, because nobody expects much from someone called Doodle.James Hurst The Scarlet Ibis
Reaction Lead"Never shall I forget that night, the first night in camp, which has turned my life into one long night, seven times cursed and seven times sealed. Never shall I forget that smoke. Never shall I forget the little faces of the children, whose bodies I saw turned into wreaths of smoke beneath a silent blue sky. Never shall I forget those flames which consumed my faith forever. Never shall I forget that nocturnal silence which deprived me, for all eternity, of the desire to live. Never shall I forget those moments which murdered my God and my soul and turned my dreams to dust. Never shall I forget these things, even if I am condemned to live as long as God Himself. Never." Elie Wiesel - Night
Setting Lead Now the sunlight had lifted clear of the open space and withdrawn from the sky. Darkness poured out, submerging the ways between the trees till they were dim and strange as the bottom of the sea. The candle-buds opened their wide white flowers glimmering under the light that pricked down from the first stars. Their scent spilled out into the air and took possession of the island.
William Golding The Lord of the Flies
Dialogue Lead ANDY, YOURE NOT GOING to believe this. This is the type of sentence that, when said in a vacuum, doesnt reveal much. Whatever it is that I am not going to believe might be very positive or very negative, and there would be no way to know until I see it. Unfortunately, this particular sentence is not said in a vacuum; its said in the Passaic County Animal Shelter. Which means that positive is no longer one of the possibilities. David Rosenfelt Play Dead
Depth Charging1. Find a telling sentence it just makes a statement.2. Write the sentence on another sheet of paper.3. Circle an interesting word (avoid articles andprepositions) in the sentence4. Write a sentence, on topic, about the circled word.5. Repeat steps 3 & 4.6. Write one more sentence that connects back to the first sentence.7. Do it 3-4 times per paper.
The Voice of the SpursMy heart was beating wildly as I rode up the rickety old elevator. When I reached the second floor, the door opened to reveal a most peculiar sight. Instead of a state-of-the-art radio facility, the place was gutted and full of construction workers. Taken aback by the surprising surroundings, I walked up to the secretary and told her that I was scheduled to meet with Jay Howard for a job interview. She replied that he was not in yet and to take a seat.
ConclusionsCallback when something at the onset is referenced at the end ties the piece w/a bowDialogue character says something meaningful, a lesson, that contributes to the essay Contemplative thinking, reflective, tells the reader what insights/lessons learnedQuotation not given by character but outside source.