Writing 1

Day 4

What did you do this weekend?

I had an amazing weekend! My boyfriend and I ran a 5K on Saturday morning. It was fun because every kilometer they threw colored chalk on you. I was very colorful by the end of the race. Afterwards, we went to the Michael Buble concert. We had amazing seats because my friend works for the arena. Michael Buble is such a wonderful performer. I had the greatest time!

Topic Sentences

• Topic• Explain what the whole thing is about• Normally first sentence (second or third is ok)• Process topic sentences – explain steps– By doing this, I follow these steps.

• Very important part of your paragraph!!!!

Prompt 1

An achievement is something you have already done. It is something you are proud of. It is something others wish they did but may not do it or may want to do it but need more time to do it. What is your greatest achievement? Write a paragraph about the steps you took to accomplish your greatest achievement.

Topic Sentences

• One of my greatest achievements is when I received a my certification of cosmetology.

• My greatest achievement was when I bought my first car.

• One of my greatest achievements in my life is to become a police officer.

• I want to open my own bakery.

Topic Sentences

• To be part of Bergen Community College I have to follow these steps.• These steps are my achievement steps.

• For me my achievement was when I met a family member.

• My achievement is to be a teacher.

Prompt 2

Abraham Lincoln once said, “Everyone is as happy as they choose to be.” How do you stay happy? Write a paragraph about the steps you take each day to live a happy life.

Topic Sentence

• To stay happy you have to take consideration of these steps.

• I take each day to live a happy life by following these four steps.

• I am lucky that I was born.

Topic Sentence

• This is how I live happy each day.

• What do I do everyday to be happy?

• A few steps can make a happy life.

Read the prompts. Make topic sentences.

• What things do you need to do to make new friends?

• How did you obtain your driver’s license?• What steps must you take to find a new

home?• How do you get ready quickly in the morning?

Amazing Writing!My greatest achievement was when I received certificate of

cosmetology. First, I went to the academy of a beauty artist. The class was from 9-6 during the weekdays. It was hard for me but I am happy that I chose it. Next, I studied hard and practiced repeatedly. I learned techniques and training skills. I had to practice for hours and sometimes much more than others. After that, I had to practice on people by myself. I was brave and needed courage. Sometimes I practiced with my daughter. My oldest daughter gave me her hair so I could practice changing the colors. It was difficult in the beginning but it became easier with time. It was important that I believed myself and wasn’t afraid. Finally, I passed the exam. I got a certificate of cosmetology. It was great thing for me. I want to get a new job with it!

Amazing Writing!My greatest achievement was when I received certificate of

cosmetology. First, I went to the academy of a beauty artist. The class was from 9-6 during the weekdays. It was hard for me but I am happy that I chose it. Next, I studied hard and practiced repeatedly. I learned techniques and training skills. I had to practice for hours and sometimes much more than others. After that, I had to practice on people by myself. I was brave and needed courage. Sometimes I practiced with my daughter. My oldest daughter gave me her hair so I could practice changing the colors. It was difficult in the beginning but it became easier with time. It was important that I believed myself and wasn’t afraid. Finally, I passed the exam. I got a certificate of cosmetology. It was great thing for me. I want to get a new job with it!

Six Types of Paragraphs

• Process – steps to achieve something• Descriptive• Narrative• Argument

Six Types of Paragraphs

• Process – steps to achieve something• Descriptive• Narrative• Argument

Six Types of Paragraphs

• Process – steps to achieve something• Descriptive

Being descriptive is painting a picture with words.

Descriptive Paragraph Requirements

• Topic Sentence• Transitions• Facts and Opinions• Adjectives• Thesis Statement

What did you do this weekend?

I had an amazing weekend! My boyfriend and I ran a 5K on Saturday morning. It was fun because every kilometer they threw colored chalk on you. I was very colorful by the end of the race. Afterwards, we went to the Michael Buble concert. We had amazing seats because my friend works for the arena. Michael Buble is such a wonderful performer. I had the greatest time!

LOOK FOR FACTS

What did you do this weekend?

I had an amazing weekend! My boyfriend and I ran a 5K on Saturday morning. It was fun because every kilometer they threw colored chalk on you. I was very colorful by the end of the race. Afterwards, we went to the Michael Buble concert. We had amazing seats because my friend works for the arena. Michael Buble is such a wonderful performer. I had the greatest time!

LOOK FOR FACTS

What did you do this weekend?

I had an amazing weekend! My boyfriend and I ran a 5K on Saturday morning. It was fun because every kilometer they threw colored chalk on you. I was very colorful by the end of the race. Afterwards, we went to the Michael Buble concert. We had amazing seats because my friend works for the arena. Michael Buble is such a wonderful performer. I had the greatest time!

LOOK FOR OPINIONS

What did you do this weekend?

I had an amazing weekend! My boyfriend and I ran a 5K on Saturday morning. It was fun because every kilometer they threw colored chalk on you. I was very colorful by the end of the race. Afterwards, we went to the Michael Buble concert. We had amazing seats because my friend works for the arena. Michael Buble is such a wonderful performer. I had the greatest time!

LOOK FOR OPINIONS

What did you do this weekend?

I had an amazing weekend! My boyfriend and I ran a 5K on Saturday morning. It was fun because every kilometer they threw colored chalk on you. I was very colorful by the end of the race. Afterwards, we went to the Michael Buble concert. We had amazing seats because my friend works for the arena. Michael Buble is such a wonderful performer. I had the greatest time!

LOOK FOR ADJECTIVES

What did you do this weekend?

I had an amazing weekend! My boyfriend and I ran a 5K on Saturday morning. It was fun because every kilometer they threw colored chalk on you. I was very colorful by the end of the race. Afterwards, we went to the Michael Buble concert. We had amazing seats because my friend works for the arena. Michael Buble is such a wonderful performer. I had the greatest time!

LOOK FOR ADJECTIVES

A Biological Treasure

Read pg 25 in “Engaging Writing 1”. Let’s look for adjectives, opinions, and facts.

What are some facts in Paragraph 1?

What are some facts in Paragraph 2?

What is an opinion in paragraph 4?

Name someadjectives.

What is theparagraph about?

Listing

PLACES EVENTS

Listing

PLACES EVENTSThe beachBelgiumDisney WorldMy apartmentA parkMy favorite restaurant

Run or DyeA WeddingMy Birthday PartySuper Bowl GraduationBaseball game

Tell Your Partner About Your Favorite Place or Event

General vs Specific Topics

Baseball game

General topic

Phillies vs Mets

2008 World Series 2010

August 27,

2013 game Specific topic

Listing

PLACES EVENTSThe beach – Outer BanksBelgium - BruggeDisney World – Magic KingdomMy apartment – 5 OakA park – Washington Square My favorite restaurant – Brother Jimmies

Run or DyeA Wedding – Aurelia’sMy Birthday Party – 30thSuper Bowl - 2009Graduation – of NYUBaseball game – World Series 2010

Topic Sentence

Magic Kingdom in Walt Disney World is an amazing place.

• State the place or event and it’s location• Give an adjective that describes that place or

event.

Prewriting Using a Bubble Map

• Pick an event or place and write down all the words you can think about on that topic.

Mapping

Magic Kingdom

magical

laughing

Amusement park

hotdogs

busy

Long lines

music

family

Little children

characters

Good foodvacation

Prewriting Using a Bubble Map

• Group things that go together.Mapping

Magic Kingdom

magical laughing

Amusement park

hotdogs

busyLong lines

music

family

Little children

characters

Good food

vacation

Choose two or three focus points.

Magic Kingdom

magical laughing

Amusement park

hotdogs

Long lines

music

family

Little children

characters

Good food

vacation

busy

All these things are fun!!

Topic Sentence with Focus Point Statement

• Topic sentence: Magic Kingdom in Walt Disney World is an amazing place.

• Focus Point Statement: Magic Kingdom in Walt Disney World is an amazing place because it’s magical and fun.

Good Topic Statements

Magic Kingdom in Walt Disney World is an amazing place because it’s magical and fun.

Topic

Controlling Ideas/Focus Points

OutlineI. Topic: Magic Kingdom

A. MagicalB. Fun

II. MagicalA. Laughing childrenB. MusicC. Characters

III. FunA. FoodB. RidesC. Vacation

IV. Closing Sentence: Recommend or suggest

Create a Bubble Map of Your Place or Event

Choose focus points and make an outline

I. Topic: ______________A. Focus Point 1 ______________B. Focus Point 2 ______________

II. Focus Point 1: _____________A. Detail 1B. Detail 2C. Detail 3

III. Focus Point 2: ________________A. Detail 1B. Detail 2C. Detail 3

IV. Closing Sentence: Recommend or suggest

Write It!Magic Kingdom in Walt Disney World is an amazing place because it’s magical and fun. First, Magic Kingdom is a magical place. When you first walk into the park, you see children laughing. They are having such a wonderful time. You can also hear loud music from the rides that makes you feel you are in a different country. Characters like Mickey Mouse and Donald Duck are walking around with real people too. It makes you feel like you are in a fairytale. Secondly, Magic Kingdom is a lot of fun. It has great rides. It also has amazing food. It is a wonderful vacation spot for the family. In conclusion, I recommend Magic Kingdom for a wonderful vacation.

This is not finished. However, I want to get my ideas down, so this is the product you see.

Homework

• Write your paragraph.

• Bring with you next week for additional information and discussion.